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All have been laid to rest, all expect memories. Throughout the years, shinobi - men and women - have learned how to preserve the memories of thousand of great shinobi that have lived, and then have passed. Though, they never managed to gain the memories of Uzumaki Naruto, Haruno Sakura, and Uchiha Sasuke. These three ninjas are wildly known as the Three Heroes of the world. They are the mirror images of their legendary Sannin teachers, and touched everyone's life in some sort of way. Their memory though has been scattered across the world, and the pieces of their chakra find themselves locked away in certain men and women, wildly known as the Kages of today. They are the shadows and guardians of today's new era, and they seem to wait for something to happen. They await for Madara Uchiha to return, the Fourth Shinobi War had been created by none ever than Obito Uchiha, Kakashi's old friend whom he thought had died. In this war, numerous men and women died trying to protect all that they thought was right and true, in the end - Naruto, Sakura and Sasuke had perished by giving up their lives to kill Madara and Obito Uchiha. Their chakra awoken a sleeping God, whom took the combined power of the ten bijuu, kurama and the eight tailed bijuu's life source and basically recreated life anew. These memories however, are gone, and cannot be recreated or found in any memory book, or even in text. This story is being told through the combined chakra fragments of the Legendary Heroes that each Kage takes upon their death and inserts into a crystal fragment. However, life as everyone now knows, is finally changing. Kazengakure and Hyozangakure had finally came to an agreement of forming a grand alliance between their villages, rumored that they were related by distant cousins, this alliance would be greater than any had ever seen. The day of the treaty being signed, and thus the festival on the island of Heiwa, a new danger had awaken that day. The Sage of Six Paths was unable to keep a dark entity in slumber from the grave and beyond; a new five tailed bijuu - the Hydra - had awoken. In a fit of rage and unknown, the Hydra destroyed half of the festival grounds, killing more than five thousand civilians and shinobi alike. The Bijuu set it's eyes on the building where the witnessing six kages were located, and destroyed the entire building. Three months had passed, and Sannins of each village filled the spots of the Kages, as many hoped that one day there would be news that someone had survived the attack. Only the Hyozangakure's kage had returned, apparently unaware of what happened. Because of this, many of the villages have returned hostile towards each other, many blaming Hyozengakure for the attack that killed each of the Kage's. Slowly, men and women of each village are elected to fill the Kage spots of each of the village, alliances are being forged and mended. But can anyone form a great alliance to take down Hydria, and once again, scatter all of the tailed beasts across the world?

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"I will make you disappear!"


    Name: Hakai
    Middle: NONE
    Surname: None
    Age: 300+ looks 20ish
    Gender: Male
    Sexual Orientation: STRAIGHT (why is this important in an app?>?)

    Overall Appearance: Hakai is six foot, five inches and just under two hundred and twenty-five pounds. He is a a tall man, and rather built. He has a very tone skin and is completely covered chiseled in muscles. He is in no way buff, but has a strong slim build. He isn't rippling with massive muscles and doesn't have much bulk. But despite this he is well built, with broad shoulders and strong limbs. His body is perfectly textured as he is a work out maniac. Hakai has auburn dark brown hair with a long pony tail that hangs down his back wildly. The rest of his hair also dangle wildly and is tussled around everywhere. He has piercing animal brown eyes, that are bright and can be seen clearly by all. They have a cannibalistic shine to them as they are vertically slanted, like a wild animal.

    His skin is not bare however, its covered in 100s of ink tattoos, from his back to chest, wrists, hands, feet, and even in his mouth. They are each a unique seal that Hakai sealed upon his body. They are on every inch of his body, he uses them from his unique weaponry style. If he uses up the sealed items for one of his tattoos he can simply reseal more items in the permanent seals on his body. Though have seals on his back or other areas don't make sense to most, he has a unique fighting style using his projectile mastery in unison with his other techniques.

    Hakai is tan from spending much of his days in the sun, very little clothes if any. He often sun baths on top of the Mizukage Mansion, simply because he can. He is almost always seen without a shirt on and in a pair of shorts; but no matter what clothes he is wearing he is seen with Samehada on his back. Even when he goes swimming or surfing he can be seen with Samehada on his back. He never wears his official jounin uniform around the village. He normally wears a self made robe around the village with the words "Big Pimp'in" on the back; always wears nothing but short or underwear beneath it. Still remaining shirtless most of the time. Hakai normally walks barefoot everywhere, even to important meetings. But in battle he is seen in his full uniform. *character picture* As with his personality his clothing attire changes based on what he is doing. If need he will wear full battle uniform.


    Overall Personality: Hakai is laid back and carefree for the most part. He always has a jovial behavior even in fights or battles. He is also very charismatic and avert to praising other, including enemies or other people not from his village. He believe any extraordinary jutsu or ability deserves praise and honor. He is a kind man and believes the best in people. He even gets excited if an opponents has great skill or does a powerful attack. But for the most part Hakai just swims in the ocean and goes surfing. He doesn't care for work. He is a carefree elite ninja, and is best described as a beach bum.

    But despite these positive behaviors Hakai has a serious side. He has strong concern for the people of his friends and his family. He hates the thought have having to battle his fellow allied ninja. But if they to turn against him he would have no hesitation in killing them. Anyone who endangers his clan and the people of it, will be his enemies. He remembers enemies for life if you get on his bad side, there is no chance of getting off of it. He dislikes people who are always series, or are over cocky in their power. He believe that you should never brag, but let you abilities and skills speak for themselves.

    On top of his serious side Hakai is a completely different person in battle. He can be describe as a relentless demon, ruthless and cunning in his battle strategies. In war young teens and experienced adults are blurred to him. It is all based on the headband and the side they fight on. He will slay an enemy without a second thought or a single thought of mercy. Because of his war experience and his ability to be a perfect shinobi. Which is why outside of battle he takes such a relaxed approach to life. For Hakai knows all to well that the ninja world cannot have peace forever. He is always read to step up when his village and country needs him.

    likes: fighting, canines, swords, power, friends, meat
    Dislikes: Akatsuki, vegetarians, vegetables, cowards, cockiness
    Catch Phrase: Congratulations..... Now I am going to kill you.





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"Sad thing is, they weren't very important when starting out.."


    Village: None
    Rank: S rank Missing Ninja
    Bloodline: None Jashism
    Elements: NONE
    Specialization: Kenjutsu, Weaponry, taijutsu



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Hakai's Water Rapier
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Hakai's Golden Handle
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Hakai's Black Umbrellas and Demon Umbrella
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Random Equipment
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"Dad. You grew up with them, right? Mind telling me their story?"

    Birth Date: Winter
    Home Village/Current: None, Never joined one
    Parents: Deceased
    Siblings: MIA
    Sensei / Role Model: Father: Deceased
    History:
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Weaponry and Kenjutsu Techniques
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Curse Technique: Death Controlling Possessed Blood
Rank: Forbidden
Type: kinjutsu
Description: Primary method of killing his opponents in the way of the Jashin religion. First, the user makes every effort to draw blood from his opponent and ingest it. After that, his skin turns black with white markings that makes him look like a skeleton, a symbol of absolute death. He then draws Jashin's symbol on the ground stands in the centre. This serves as the link between him and his victim.
Once his sacrificial ritual takes place, the victim is linked with Hidan until he either steps or is forced out of the circle. Any kind of injury that Hidan inflicts upon himself (or the injury they inflicted on him) is reciprocated on his target, be it a mere scratch to a pierce in the heart. If Hidan is forced to step out of the circle, the link is broken and the victim is set free, but all Hidan has to do is to step back into the circle to reactivate the link. Basically, this technique makes Hidan a living voodoo doll.


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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeWed May 02, 2012 2:01 pm

Jutsu need to be approved with the app if this is approved without jutsu located on it then your character knows no jutsu

Specialization: Ninjutsu, kenjutsu, Speed << Speed is'nt a speciality
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeWed May 02, 2012 4:26 pm

remove speed as your spec as it is not a known spec thank you and repleace it with something else
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeFri May 04, 2012 2:07 pm

So here is my question... how do I make my character unique. He only uses physical specialties, and speed is his only advantage. To allow him to fight someone who can fire massive chakra blasts at him. So where can I put on my app that he has in creased speed? Or anything like that....
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeMon May 07, 2012 1:00 am

Water Rapier:

Description: Hakai's greatest weapon is any Rapier sword, this one was given to him by the Samuri. After he mastered their sword art. It is sharp enough to cleanly slice, stab or cleave off flesh, without staining his blade. The weapon is perfection in Hakai's hand and is created perfectly for his large body. But after receiving the blade Hakai went back to his ninja master, who would help him seal the blade to make it even stronger. By in fusing a mass of water elemental chakra in the very core of the sword, the sword gain a interesting eff. The sword cries, and release water only a drop or so at a time. But if the blade was examined closes one could see it is entirely covered in a thin layer of water. Crystal clear, but the entire blade is covered in water. But the water never deludes the blade from slicing, and because it runs over it constantly it never dulls. It keeps it as sharp as any blade could possibly be. Hakai often uses the water as a distraction in a fight, by flinging it at someone. As they would be expecting just water to come off of a blade, it often startles them. But the water plays a different roll when it comes into contact with blood. The water immediately return into the blade with the blood. The blood is sent to a clear container at the bottom of the blade, where Hakai can open and get the blood. Once the blood is brought in the water reflows over the blade to bring in more blood.

Issue: But the water plays a different roll when it comes into contact with blood. The water immediately return into the blade with the blood. The blood is sent to a clear container at the bottom of the blade, where Hakai can open and get the blood. Once the blood is brought in the water reflows over the blade to bring in more blood.

Any blood? Like blood on objects, wounds, and the ground. Dry blood, fresh blood? Why exactly does the water on your rapier retrieve blood. Is that just the ability? Also are you saying that it makes more blood, sucks in more blood or are you implying that its sole purpose is to keep your rapier sharp and bring in the blood it makes contact with?


Demon Umbrella:

Description:
Hakai has a single umbrella on his waist, sometime he will store it inside of Samehada so to be used for a surprise attack. The only other weapon on his that he doesn't summon is Samehada. The umbrella is made of leather with titanium alloid plates. It is light and easily wielded. The umbrella that has had several custom modifications made to it. It can spew flames from the tip of it and release blocks of exploding tags, comprised of 25 tags in each bundle. They are launched from the sides, their are four on the umbrella. Additionally, the handle could be removed from the umbrella to reveal a hidden sword, the s Thize of an average katana. Hakai uses this umbrella to fly and release his strongest weaponry style technique.


Issue: Im not sure if you made this one up or if its custom, but im going to treat it as is; unless noted. First you dont have samehada and this description implies that you do, so alter that. Second it shoots out blocks of explosive tags ...should be fine if the tags are coming from your repertoire. Third i dont like that this can allow you to fly; i can understand that it can allow you to lift off the ground up to a cetain height but flying implies that you can stay in the air, and even control where you are going. So remove flight and explain how high you can go, and how long will it take you to get back down. So pretty much im gunna allow some gliding but not actual flight.



Issue: Also for other weapons, you are requesting way too much. There isn't really a rule about how many basic items you can request for S rank but do note that some of your items like titanium nails are customs and should be treated as such. So take out the customs and place them in their correct templates, like your rapiers. Also note that some of your requested items are not salvageable if used in battle, like your explosive tags.
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeWed May 09, 2012 3:24 pm

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Issue: But the water plays a different roll when it comes into contact with blood. The water immediately return into the blade with the blood. The blood is sent to a clear container at the bottom of the blade, where Hakai can open and get the blood. Once the blood is brought in the water reflows over the blade to bring in more blood.

Any blood? Like blood on objects, wounds, and the ground. Dry blood, fresh blood? Why exactly does the water on your rapier retrieve blood. Is that just the ability? Also are you saying that it makes more blood, sucks in more blood or are you implying that its sole purpose is to keep your rapier sharp and bring in the blood it makes contact with?

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Issue: Im not sure if you made this one up or if its custom, but im going to treat it as is; unless noted. First you dont have samehada and this description implies that you do, so alter that. Second it shoots out blocks of explosive tags ...should be fine if the tags are coming from your repertoire. Third i dont like that this can allow you to fly; i can understand that it can allow you to lift off the ground up to a cetain height but flying implies that you can stay in the air, and even control where you are going. So remove flight and explain how high you can go, and how long will it take you to get back down. So pretty much im gunna allow some gliding but not actual flight.


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Issue: Also for other weapons, you are requesting way too much. There isn't really a rule about how many basic items you can request for S rank but do note that some of your items like titanium nails are customs and should be treated as such. So take out the customs and place them in their correct templates, like your rapiers. Also note that some of your requested items are not salvageable if used in battle, like your explosive tags.

1.)The Raiper abilities sharpness the blade and brings in ANY blood it touches. It doesn't matter where the source comes from blood is blood, and the swords sealing activate when it comes into contact with blood.

2.) The demon umbrella is cannon and custom. It was justed by the a Rain jounin, he had a different name for it. The only real difference between mine umbrella and his cannon one, is the explosive tag bundle. Instead of firing a spring load 25 stack of explosive tags, his fire a jet of fire like a flame thrower.

3.) I have as many weapons as genin tenten did. I actually should probably have a lot more. I am a weaponry style user. My weapons have to fight against ninjutsu technique, so I need as many as possible. Also titanium nails aren't custom they were used in a anime arc, for a weaponry technique. You can find on my weapon list. Let me know if you need me to still edit thing or make any changes.
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeThu May 10, 2012 12:55 am

1) I'll only allow fresh blood. The reason being is that your rapier is pretty much allowing you to obtain blood without having to hit the opponent. A single drop of water has to hit your opponent and you will have their blood sample within second,and into your grand technique. If that's the case you will pretty much kill anyone without even having to make contact, and it might land on some dried up blood on a scab and suddenly you have the opponents blood in your possession. So i will accept the rapier's ability to give you such an advantage, only if the blood is fresh and by fresh i mean it isn't blood dried up and wiped on a shirt, or blood stains on an object. it need s to be blood from a currently bleeding wound or bleeding caused by damage either self inflicted or done by you( like bleeding from the mouth, the guy bite himself, stuff like that)at most 3 posts ago. You might think that if you can deal blood its pointless, well its not because you wont have to use a weapon to cause the bleeding. you can punch the guy and usually when punched bleeding doesn't instantly happen so it might not get on your hands.

2) the explosive tags are coming out of your inventory every time you use them. Remove the stuff about samehada . and you can not fly you can glide. Describe how high you can ascend , how long can you remain in air, how far can you go, and how often can you do this.

3) good point, keep your weapons.

4) You need Ninjutsu as a specialty if you're going to use ... Ninjutsu


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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeThu May 10, 2012 4:34 am

to point out he cannot use ninjutsu as a jashin
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeThu May 10, 2012 9:59 am

I don't have any ninjutsu on my app. Oh ya and I will remove Samehada and stuff.....
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeThu May 10, 2012 10:51 am

Non Elemental

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These are all ninjutsu

also instead of speed as a spec, try taijutsu since you're already all physical. Your body movements will be better than most because of Taijutsu having to do with the body,technique, form, speed, and power
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Modify everything i told you to, if you don't nothing will be changed
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeFri May 11, 2012 12:48 pm

ya sorry forgot the speed thing
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PostSubject: Re: Hakai COMPLETE   Hakai COMPLETE Icon_minitimeFri May 11, 2012 3:28 pm

1) Elements . This is optional but I highly recommend that you start your S rank off with his three elements.
2) Another reason why you should is because your rapier is water element and therefore would not be able to use it’s water properties if you do not have water chakra.
3) I told you to note in the description for your water rapier that the blood has to be fresh blood and not dried out blood , such as blood on a cloth or blood stains. Has to be fresh liquid blood.
4) To clarify your rapier can not create more blood, it can only take in more blood. Water doesn’t increase the amount of blood in the storage it just gives off the illusion. I cant have you walking around with a gallon of blood when 99% of it is water.
5) Look carefully at you weapon and kenjutsu list, there is still two ninjutsu techniques in it. specifically : Name: Kekkai Houjin - Barrier Method Battle Array and Name: Homing Tag Technique (Hōmingutagu) .
6) Name: Hitei Mushou - Flying Nail Mist Pierce
Rank: C
Type: Weaponry
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Description: After forming the needed handseal, the user will emit a flying mist of small nails from his or her mouth. These small nails can travel towards his or her opponent at quite a distance.

This is not a weaponry technique. Weaponry and Kenjutsu techniques all are jutsus that uses weapons that you already have in your inventory. This technique is more ninjutsu because even though it makes weapons, its still making something out of nothing. Nowhere does it say that you put a whole mist of nails in your mouth, cause I don’t think that’s possible for your character, so therefore you have used ninjutsu to form these nails. Your torpedo jutsu is a good example of a weaponry jutsu.
7) Name: Senbon Shower
Rank: C
Type: Weaponry
Element: N/A
Description: After throwing a special umbrella that has been equipped with springs into the air, it will release a hailing "shower" of senbon. It cannot be dodged by moving away since the needles cover a wide area in all directions, controlled by chakra. Although the needles were said to be able to pierce a five millimeter thick steel sheet, they can still be blocked by a powerful enough shield. They can also be dipped in poison to increase lethality.

Are you saying that you can control the needles with your chakra? As in almost thousands of needles being controlled by you and manipulated by you to catch an opponent, which can not be dodged by moving away? If so then this is not a C rank technique. And if it can be blocked by a powerful shield, give me a rank for this shield’s strength. Also you said that your needles can be equipped with poison to become more lethal. Well if that’s the case then you must state that you have dipped a certain number of needles in poison, even if its all of them. Also being as this technique is pretty much undodgeable to those who are not equipped with the right jutsus , this technique can rarely be successfully deflected by one weapon , and that giving it a poison attribute would make it almost a one jutsu kill; this technique is already hitting S rank, especially if you can control every needle.


Cool Name: Ishibari - Stone Needles
Rank: B
Type: Weaponry
Element: N/A
Description: This technique makes use of the users chakra as a paralysing agent. The user throws kunai with strings attached at the opponent. Once the enemy is hit, chakra is run through the string to paralyse the opponent, which will serve to either incapacitate the enemy or allow the user or an ally to attack. However, against those who can absorb chakra, this technique could backfire as the target may simply steal chakra from the user, while exhibiting immunity to the paralysis.

We’re talking about paralyzing an entire body with one hit of a kunai. We not simply the area that you hit becomes paralyzed? Your technique doesn’t explain for how long the paralysis lasts but it does imply that you and/or an ally will have enough time to attack and so this technique gives way to big of an advantage. Even poison technique doesn’t cause completely paralysis when hit. I sense that this is too much for a non elemental technique to do, to an opponent. The only element that I know of that causes paralysis is lightning and even that doesn’t cause total paralysis. You put the only down fall to this technique is if someone has chakra absorbing abilities. I don’t think that ability is allowed here, and the only one close to that is the actual wielder of samehada so based on what I’ve read so far, she will be the only one with a clear chance of survival after being hit with this technique. This technique has no cool down so you can probably use it on multiple kunais at once anytime you want and cause paralysis upon simply scratching the opponent’s big toe while he was doing a back flip and there match set. So with that in mind I deny this technique. Be careful with paralysis jutsus .

Cool Name: Kuchiyose • Raikou Kenka - Summoning • Lightning Blade Creation
Rank: B
Type: Weaponry
Element: N/A
Description: The ninja tools can be summoned in an instant just by touching the sealing "marks" which can be drawn anywhere. The ninja tools are thrown with the actual speed of a "flash of lightning", ruining the opponent's outset of the battle, and snatching away the initiative. Furthermore, because the summonable ninja tools can remain hidden until right before they are used, if this technique is mastered, there are an exceptional number of possible tactics. A large number of ninja tools can be stored within the sealing marks, which can make the efficiency of this technique last longer. Hakai uses 100s of seals all over his body to summon countless ninja projectiles.

Way too fast. This isn’t a lightning tech and a flash of lightning doesn’t give any time to react. The seals can also be places ANYWHERE so therefore the possibility of the opponent not anticipating this attack is much higher for a fast technique. In short this technique is virtually on unstoppable. Ill give you a chance to fix this cause right now its not approvable especially as a B rank.

9) Name: Bombing Senbon Shower
Rank: B
Type: Weaponry
Element: N/A
Description: After throwing a special umbrella that has been equipped with springs into the air, it will release a hailing "shower" of senbon. It cannot be dodged by moving away since the needles cover a wide area in all directions, controlled by chakra. Although the needles were said to be able to pierce a five millimeter thick steel sheet, they can still be blocked by a powerful enough shield. They can also be dipped in poison to increase lethality. The umbrellas will speed at such a speed that they small tornado in the sky. Though until the parent jutsu this technique is set up to be far for lethal. As each needle has two mini explosive tags wrapped around it. They completely cover the senbon and normally aren't even visible as the needles move so fast. Allowing for user to end the move in a massive explosion.

Name: Ultra Senbon Shower
Rank: A
Type: Weaponry
Element: N/A
Description: After throwing a special umbrella that has been equipped with springs into the air, it will release a hailing "shower" of senbon. It cannot be dodged by moving away since the needles cover a wide area in all directions, controlled by chakra. Although the needles were said to be able to pierce a five millimeter thick steel sheet, they can still be blocked by a powerful enough shield. They can also be dipped in poison to increase lethal capabilities. The umbrellas will speed at such a speed that they small tornado in the sky. However this more powerful version of this technique is not over. As under the normal umbrella is six identical seals that allow the user to summon six more umbrellas. Allowing for 7x the fire rate of this technique, making it a truly powerful weapon style.

Name: Death's Shower
Rank: S
Type: Weaponry
Element: N/A
Description: The most masterful technique Hakai has invented for his Umbrella weaponry style. After throwing a special umbrella that has been equipped with springs into the air, it will release a hailing "shower" of senbon. The umbrellas will speed at such a speed that they small tornado in the sky. It cannot be dodged by moving away since the needles cover a wide area in all directions, controlled by chakra. Although the needles were said to be able to pierce a five millimeter thick steel sheet, they can still be blocked by a powerful enough shield. They can also be dipped in poison to increase lethal capabilities. However this more powerful version of this technique is not over. As under the normal umbrella is six identical seals that allow the user to summon six more umbrellas. Allowing for 7x the fire rate of this technique, making it a truly powerful weapon style. But with this senbon shower technique each senbon has 4 mini explosive tags wrapped upon it. Allowing for a giant explosion and can be release literally in waves and waves of explosions. As the umbrellas will continue to fire for four turns. Once the technique is over only the ground where Hakai stands on is safe.

Issue: well once you can fix senbon shower you can work on these three as well. Everyone of these senbon showers except for the parent jutsu senbon shower is like instant kill, unless this person is truly legendary with some kind of super speed. Because the way I see it, if your character can not survive the attack, then there is a problem unless it is meant to be a suicide tech. These techs are mis-ranked and the S rank one would not leave room for Hakai to be safe, the explosion itself would be far beyond massive and im pretty sure hakai would die from this attack even being 100 feet from the opponent.

10) Every technique you use weapons for is coming out of your inventory. There is no way you are creating explosive tags or hundreds of kunais out of thin air.

11) Name: Samuri Blade Art
Rank: S
Type: Kenjutsu
Description: An advance sword art, that Hakai spent much of his young life mastering. The style focus on unreal dashes and swings of the sword. The speed is only for bursts, and with the blade as an extention of the users arm it appears even faster. The movement is faster than a S rank shinobi's speed. But it is only for a single attack meant to interrupt the ninjas hand seals. It is how someone who mainly uses kenjutsu can counter a heavy ninjutsu/genjutsu user. As many of their techniques require hand seals. This short burst to interrupt them forces them to fight you in close combat.

Ah so this is a fighting style, the way you describe it makes it seem like you can pretty much fight using the speed of body flicker in ever movement, keeping people from using hand seals. Hmmm normally that’s a no, but I understand the why of this technique. So do change the technique so that it your character can not harm with this technique, but only disrupt hand seals. And also say that this technique can be used 3 times per topic. Since there is no avoiding this disruption I cant have you keeping an S rank from using jutsus the entire match. Also write in that you can not use this technique as a follow up technique for a combo, as in you cant stick explosive tags on people when you use this technique. There is got to be some lack of control since you are moving faster than the highest rank on the site. This is what I find fair, or else ill have to deny it.

12) For your demon umbrella you’re going to need wind element to control where it takes you, also please write how long you can remain in the air.

13) Put cool down on techniques past C rank, so that you're not spamming


Do these to the T and i will tell you what next.
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Name: Kuchiyose • Raikou Kenka - Summoning • Lightning Blade Creation
Rank: B
Type: Weaponry
Element: N/A
Description: The ninja tools can be summoned in an instant just by touching the sealing "marks" which can be drawn anywhere. The ninja tools are thrown with the actual speed of a "flash of lightning", ruining the opponent's outset of the battle, and snatching away the initiative. Furthermore, because the summonable ninja tools can remain hidden until right before they are used, if this technique is mastered, there are an exceptional number of possible tactics. A large number of ninja tools can be stored within the sealing marks, which can make the efficiency of this technique last longer. Hakai uses 100s of seals all over his body to summon countless ninja projectiles.


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